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RedPyramid!!jzO53oEvOFG Drip Drip Drip. Drip Drip Drip. Drip Drip Dri- "WHAT THE HELL IS THAT DRIPPING!" screams Rick at no one in particular. Rick lives alone, has no pets, and is in general, a very lonely man. However, for the past three days, all he has heard, constantly, 24 hours a day, is tapping. It almost sounds like a rain droplet hitting a window. But Rick has checked all his windows, he has checked all his faucets, everything. Anything that could possibly make a dripping noise, he has looked for. He decided that first thing in the morning, he'll call a plumber. If he can't find anything, he'll call an electrician. He'll call every special service in the damned phone book if he has to, but he WILL find out what this dripping noise is. So, he turns on his stereo, and goes to sleep. The dripping doesn't stop, but the music drowns it out mostly. The next morning, Rick gets the phone book. He calls plumbers, electricians, exterminators, everyone. And yet, no one can find anything inside or outside of his home that could be making this dripping noise. None of them even hear the noise.]]>RedPyramid!!jzO53oEvOFGFucking beat me to it.]]>RedPyramid!!jzO53oEvOFGRedPyramid!!jzO53oEvOFGRedPyramid!!jzO53oEvOFGSCPantera!3DiyzD/nhc If anything though, I didn't like the tongue-in-cheek implication that he had been injured in a car accident and was just hearing all this crap in his dreams. Good premise, it just came off as a little cheesy at the end there.
Try this: -man hears dripping -man hears voices encouraging him not to give up -man goes nuts from dripping -man kills self to stop noises -cut to doctors comforting family of now dead accident patient in hospital as a nurse turns off the dripping IV]]>You could probably take out the "he has looked for." in the first paragraph because it would still make sense without it and short sentences make more of a dramatic impact. Also "The dripping doesn't stop." Would be a better sentence than "...doesn't stop, the music drowns it out mostly". It would be cool if the dripping sound get louder and louder, that would build up suspence. When he kills himself it just doesn't feel like he's that crazy, that desperate.]]> tl;dr Your story needs moar of everything.]]>