I crawled towards it; inside I could hear that awful crackling sound. An……………………………..eone screaming. Suddenly, I was standing at the door. As it opened, a blast of wind knock…………nside. The door shut behind me.
The inside of the cabin was …………………………………….n flame. I stood in the middle of the wooden floor as the flames spread around me, consuming everything. Something gra………me from behind. Turning, I saw a burning bo…………………………..rawling its way up my legs. It skin was burnt black, red liquid oozing out along lines that ……………………………..est and arms. It looked at me and screamed as flames danced around its head, its eyes withering away, its tongue burning ……………..………………stump.
I kicked it away; it fell onto the floor and broke into smoldering pieces. The cabin burned away around me, flaming timbers falling to the floor. The entire building colla………………………………. a cloud of sparks. As the dust cleared I looked arou………………………………………………….
I was back in my own burnt apartment.
A pile of ash shape…………..…….. body lay by my feet.
I have barricaded myself in the bedroom, but the dust creeps und…………...

July 14th,
I can hear something stalking across the living room.
.
July 15th,
:[Burnt away.]
.
July 16th,
:[Burnt away.]
.
July 17th,
:[Burnt away.]

July 18th,
:[Damaged]
I tried to run away again. As I left the house I saw something gray walking across the living room towards me. I ran…………………………………………………………………night. The cabin was there again. I didn’t want to go in, but somethi.……………………..out of the woods at me. The place was on fire and the screaming thing attacked me. I closed my eyes until the place burnt down. The burns on my bo………………..ve spread everywhere but my face. It hurts so muc………………………………………………………..b………….ou………………
……ead.
.
July 20th,
:[Badly damaged]
Wh……..e god………………………..ve?
……………………………………………….WHY…………………………………..P
A...................................O!
…………………………………………………………………………………………
eath………………………………………..

July 21st,
:[The entry consists entirely of a drawing of the nature preserve behind Ms. Yorke’s house. Several trails are traced, and a red circle is labeled “The cabin”. Despite an extensive search of the park, no cabin or area of burnt ash has been found.
.
July 22nd,
I can only lie in the piles of mounting ash. Sometimes I see a gray form creep by, but I can’t do anything about it. My legs are falling off. I want to die.

July23rd,
:[No entry]
.
July 24th,
:[No entry. A rough sketch of a grinning face was drawn in the corner of the page, above it was the caption, “it’s in the ashes”.]
.
July 25th,
:[Entry was nearly illegible due to the nature of the writing. Experts have suggested this section was written with the pen in her mouth.]
One of my arms snapped off like burnt charcoal. I’m breaking apart. My mind feels cloudy. At least the pain is fading. I can see something gray and black looking at me from the corner of the room. I thought it was smiling but now I can see its lips are burnt off. I can’t move. I lie on the floor as pieces of the ceiling flake off and drift down. Covering everything. Small things of ash and bone skitter along the walls.

BTW: Anyone who's dealt with ash stains can tell you they are hard as FUCK to treat.

God I love you, Fedora

This story was good, great work fedora

One day, fedora, we should publish a book filled with short, scary stories like yours and maybe a few other /x/philes.

I really enjoyed that, but perhaps instead of periods, you could use spoiler text, as the black may give off a more 'charred' feeling. I guess it doesn't matter. You're an inspiration to me, all the same.

I can't sleep now. Thank you Fedora!

jesus christ that was long and boring.

>>883322
gotta love the counterpoint =)

you rule, fedora. have you thought about finding a publisher? seriously.

archive this shit

>>883177

FUCK YES!

You've outdone yourself Black Fedora! Excellent piece of work

That was amazing, intriguing, you're getting better with each story. Definitely coming a long way from the one where the old guy torments that kid with his novelty glowing eyeballs.

Great story Fedora.

Liked how you used it as a diary thing. Interesting.

On a mostly unrelated note, i'm working on my second story. Can't wait for your tenth.

The link for black fedora's other stories is sweet but reminded me why doesn't black fedora have a more extensive history regarding stories' info like feedback from readers, the time it was posted,etc.

have my motherfucking babies you cunt

you always make good stories

Damn. I can't believe I missed this one last night. Amazing, sir, simply amazing. This one gave me chills. I love the diary entry style you used, and the broken sentences definitely helped. Bravo, Fedora, bravo.

Wow, I took a break from /x/ for a while because nothing really caught my interest, but you have convinced me to check this place out more often.

Fucking great work.

I die

cool story bro

Kinda reminds me of that movie 1408.

Good but not great.

Wonderful as always

I only ever read /x/, I never really post anything. But I felt the need to post and say these stories are amazing! I hope to see more. Good luck with your writing.

not a trilby

It's pretty impressive how much sympathy for Angela you managed to evoke in such a short story!


Also, Angelas ashes, lolz0r beams

story repeats and there's no need for such a long time to things happen, just makes the tale longer and unrealistic (almost a month. someone always notice when you disappear that long). you could compress some minor events in one day and cut half of those days written "burn away"

just my opinion as fellow writer about your tale. and sorry about the bad english, not my native language. keep up the good work.

history is good, anyway.

>>886541

I disagree!

At fist, I'll admit, I thought it unrealistic and fairly pointless to have it taking place over such a long period, but (for me at least) most of the sympathy I felt for Angela was as a result of her having spent so much time in that state, not knowing what the shit was going on and obviously scared and in pain.


"I want to die" is so honest and to the point it hurts :|

om nom nom

It would be nice to make the diary.
But I don't feel that my handwriting matches Angela's personality. Ah well.

Awesome stuff.

fantastic, dude. it would be awesome if you could turn some of these into comics.

>>883262
just ask any smoker :D
they fucking are.

>>887815
Impressive that anon recognizes the importance of linking personality with handwriting.

>>888106
Plays a role in several Lovecraft stories.

Might be an explanation for why anon would think of it.